In Response To: Steel
Date: Thu May 27 01:54:21 2004
From: I\\iterate from a cupboard.
Subject: Poet Sethlans in Love.

>"Though *we be* many leagues apart."<:
"be" there breaks English... of course! we be/exist. And we aren't
leagues nor leagues apart.
Try: Though we Not inclose ( by many leagues) upon this day,
and...?

>"A gentle pulse now throbs for you, the armour gone that saved it pain."<:
Of course the pulse did before... the throbs, yours? That pulse becomes other
than gentle? In what way is "a gentle pulse for you"? The pulse throbs
for "the armour gone that saved it/pain"---Why?

>"Deprived of shield, no barrier tough."<:
Deprived of "no barrier tough/no sheild" means you have a barrier,
that barrier isn't tough nor a shield?

"But if it softly doest thee treat and whisper words of love so sweet"
Um?... love, has to be...

HAVE IT YOUR WAY!... ITS A GREAT POEM, Sethlans.
We all know what one means by "Sail to paradise" though paradise is
everywhere. hahaha
I hide here ( on this site ) by using lower Case "n"s. Oh, well, back
to my cupboard and uncle ***.

• Steel by Sethlans on Wed May 26 22:04:41 2004
  • Poet Sethlans in Love. by I\\iterate from a cupboard. on Thu May 27 01:54:21 2004
    • Re: Poet Sethlans in Love. by Sethlans on Thu May 27 22:47:52 2004
    • in-love by # on Thu May 27 01:55:03 2004